Let’s write some things, round 2.

Who was adventurous & tried the exercise from a few posts back?

If you are just joining us, I assigned a writing exercise intended to help the mind be more imaginative. While I was writing, I couldn’t help but purposely relate the three sets of sentences below with the same subject matter. I almost wish I wouldn’t have, but I couldn’t control it. I wrote the first things I thought of; they just popped right onto the paper. Gee wiz! I wrote for 16 minutes.

1.     “The horse felt obliged to express itself by…” kicking the rose bush.

2.     (sentence before #1.) The race was finished, but the racehorse was not. She kept running, race-mode kind of running. Good for her, but she ran off of the racetrack and out of the stadium! Derby hats all rotated in similar fashion, the stands were fully synchronized like never before as all of the fans watched the horse in awe. (I embellished this a bit after I stopped timing myself.)

3.     (sentence after #1.) Is it just me, or is this horse dumb as a box of rocks?

 

4.     “She could not help herself, the date was waiting…” for the race that was only a day away! Her life’s work would be displayed for all to see in a quick 2-minute race. The horse’s performance would define her reputation in the small town community she’d grown up in and never ventured from.

5.     (sentence before #4.) Once upon a time, there was a jockey named Petunia.

6.     (sentence after #4.) The horse was revved up and ready. She ran as hard as she could, only to place third in the race.

 

7.     “Elvira looked at her brother’s fast-growing…”  feet. His feet were so big; they were growing out of proportion to his body. How could this be?

8.     (sentence before #8.) Well, as it turns out, growth spurts are real. Especially for Doug and his feet.

9.     (sentence after #7.) To alleviate stress from his feet, Doug hopped on his horse and rode off into the sunset. Then there she was, a well-groomed horse. Poor thing though, she was covered in rose thorns. Doug set his mind to work, also helping him from focusing on his engorged feet. He wanted to help the horse. Where did she come from anyway?

Notepad w/ writing exercise

Notepad w/ writing exercise

The order I put the sentences in, from start to finish, is: #5., #4., #6., #2., #1., #3., #8., #7. & #9.

Here’s the story (with a few words added to string the sentences together):

Once upon a time, there was a jockey named Petunia. She could not help herself; the date was waiting for the race that was only a day away! Her life’s work would be displayed for all to see in a quick 2-minute race. The horse’s performance would define her reputation in the small town community she’d grown up in and never ventured from.  The horse was revved up and ready. She ran as hard as she could, only to place third in the race.

The race was finished, but the racehorse was not. She kept running, race-mode kind of running. Good for her, but she ran off of the racetrack and out of the stadium! Derby hats all rotated in similar fashion, the stands were fully synchronized like never before as all of the fans watched the horse in awe. The horse felt obliged to express itself by kicking the rose bush. Is it just me, or is this horse dumb as a box of rocks?

All the while, in the same small town community there is a boy named Doug. He likes horse riding as well. However, he has a bigger problem that a lot of neighbors are baffled by. Well, as it turns out, growth spurts are real. Especially for Doug and his feet. One day, Elvira looked at her brother’s fast-growing feet. His feet were so big; they were growing out of proportion to his body. How could this be? To alleviate stress from his feet, Doug hopped on his horse and rode off into the sunset. Then there she was, a well-groomed horse. Poor thing though, she was covered in rose thorns. Doug set his mind to work, also helping him from focusing on his engorged feet. He wanted to help the horse. Who would do this to a horse? Why was she left all alone to fend for herself? Where did she come from? Why is she so well-groomed?

-Kalli

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